Critic my resume and cover letter... please.
Hi Everyone, Just wondering if you wouldn't mind giving me some professional feedback on my resume and cover letter. I graduated June 2008 from Advertising & Marketing strategies course. Since then I have been applying to many positions whether it be simple office work to work in the Industry- of course as a junior position.
Any kind of response will be greatly appreciated - positive or negative.
Thank you.
Any kind of response will be greatly appreciated - positive or negative.
Thank you.
Tags: Advertising, Industry, Junior, Position, Resume
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Permalink Reply by TJ on -
Needs more bullets...especially in the "skills" dept., it kind of reads like a college course catalog description. I mean you really don't need to tell me what a waitress does or that your tables "were always clean and ready"...
I'd also consolidate some of the stuff in your "Experience" dept. Tell me in a nutshell what you did there and omit the fact that you were there for only 2 months.
Mount Forrest Chamber of Commerce:
Facilitated and coordinated numerous successful marketing strategies, advertising campaigns and tourist publications for the city of Mount Forrest.
Don't need to tell me what each part of Adobe's CS3 entails...
This needs to be cut down to one page....and it needs a "slap in the face", if that makes any sense?
Where's the spark? Make me want to meet you in person. This one sheet of paper is supposed to represent you...and right now it makes you seem ...vanilla.
Tell me you kick ass and take names and that's that.
Do you have a link to ANY of your work?
Repeating the same "quote" a few times in your resume is boring and predictable.
I mean in a not-so-subtle way...you need to tell me that if I hire you, my company will never be the same - in a great way.
Hope this helps.
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Permalink Reply by Buddy 'Friendly' Wachenheimer on
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Good advice, pal. For as long as I've know you, you too "were always clean and ready"
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Permalink Reply by TJ on
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Brazilian waxes on the go....I think the day I was awaken at the beach by a huge group of pesky kids - poking at my speedo with a stick while shrieking (thinking my groin region was a trapped Tarantula) told me that attention was due...
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Permalink Reply by Jim Powell on
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I think TJ has been very helpful there - but could go further. Your first line is
"My name is Victoria Blair". Is that necessary - it says your name at the top of the CV.
You need to bound in with line one - I just looked at some of the work that you do on your site and .....
You need to come across as enthusiastic and excited with langauge without saying I am this I am that - cliche cliche.
The CV is well laid out I will give you that.
Would it be advisably to choose an advertising realated quote perhaps from Olgivy or Burnett or something, unless that quote / mantra is really dear to you - it is very nothingy - anyone could choose that quote to feign being ambitious. Why not shoose one that is funny or cheeky or thought provoking, that no one else would choose?
All the best
Jim
"It willl be alright in the end, if it's not alright, then its not the end."
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Victoria, read this four times- http://adholes.com/postings/ff94d56bf61d982848abc13927fadd57
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Permalink Reply by TJ on
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Go figure...ADGabbers biggest miscreants always seem to have the right things to say for the right situations.
*Betty Boop finger-to-the-lips/Doe-eyed face*
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picks up magic 8 ball gives it a shake - nods head in agreement
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Permalink Reply by TJ on
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one of my favorite quotes of all time is "Blood in your mouth means you either did something really stupid, really brave...or both"
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Permalink Reply by J.S. Gilbert on -
Hi Victoria,
Despite my having kicked around for quite some time, I'm still pretty much a small fish. I am on the advisory boards for a couple of ad schools and have been to quite a few job fairs and portfolio shows and I ocassionally get sent letter and resumes from people like yourself.
My personal feeling is that the mass (one size fits all) cover letter won't get you far. I need to see in your letter who you are, what you know about me and my company, where you see the fit and what you can contribute to me.
You need to show that you know who some of my clients are and know about some of the campaigns we have done, etc. This is relatively easy to discover by visitng agency websites (or if you're looking for in-house work at a large corporation, same thing)
Even more so, if you can put your finger on the core beliefs of my firm and then indicate how you fit in, so much the better.
Put your skills upfront. Don't make me dig to find out you have Photoshop experience, for example.
Make this read a little more human and not quite so clinical and I agree with T.J. in that you must have a website that you can send me to that will showcase your work.
The other comments here are quite valid, if you strain them and serve them over rice.
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cous cous or bulgar wheat will work just as well too if you fancy
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Permalink Reply by martin Leach on
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Everything that these seasoned veterans told you plus I think you need an apostrophe in the word "client's" in the second paragraph. I agree that you should get a better quote, but if your going to use that one you need make it your own. You say "I use this quote because I like success and achievement..." or something along those lines. Of course you like success and achievement. Who doesn't? Instead you should say things like "I am a successful achiever..." Do you see what I mean? Be more proactive in your writing and do not use so much passive voice.
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